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What do you think of my writing?
A train’s wheels came to a halt, and then its silvery doors opened while a mechanical voice around the station reminded people to walk. One of the last passengers to come out was a young man who wore a thick, hooded jacket. He breathed into the cold night air. A wisp of white formed, and then vanished. If he were younger, he might have said he was a dragon. Now, it’s just no fun.
“A dragon…” he whispered to himself. His eyes widened, “Oh yeah,” he said.
Years ago, he had met someone important here, and they were talking about the wisps of white and pretending to be dragons.
That was back during the days of youth.
He sighed.
Back when one could have dreams.
He closed his eyes.
When things made more sense…
Your writing is good, but there are a few things to improve upon. If there isn't an introduction, make one, the reader must know WHERE the train is stopping. Eliminate comas where possible to have your writin flow more easily. Keep it up and remember to have as vivid imagery as possible 